shobha - Wednesday, March 05, 2008 3:35:32 AM
Painting "Sea of Time" by Shobha Nayar Pandit...done on Microsoft Paint and then on Photoshop.
DETACHMENT
I stand on the shores of the sea of Time
Feeling its blue waters wash my feet,
The sprays sprinkling my face,
Cold drenched, scattered waves,
Rip roaring ebb and flow,
I am the wave and the spray,
And yet - I am neither.
Time stolen moments
Ebb and flow -
My mind is the ocean
And I am the shore,.
In concert yet detached.
Copyright ©2008 Shobha Nayar Pandit
Comments
This poem and image perhaps has the strongest pull on me. Some of my most peaceful dreams have been shape-shifting ones. I would consider revising this poem, for exmample:
shores of the sea of time
blue waters wash my feet....
Take out the extraneous sentence structure, since it is a poem. Shorter lines lend itself to the mystic feel of this piece.
The poem falls apart for me with "Time stolen moments." I was all set to become part of that ocean with you. how blue is the underside of that wave in the sunlight. What are the angelfish like.
A very Zen poem. Very lovely Shobha.
Lucy